This is an excellant story layout, i like how it doesent get rediculous and involve everyone getting fat. But also at the same time i find the story lacking in structure, the characters are ill defined, and the setting changes periodicly. Yet, over all it is a good story, besides, all stories have strong points and weak points, so keep it up.
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