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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'd like to offer you my review of your short story "The Triangle."


WHAT WORKED

It painted a story that can easily be visualized as I read. The story kept my interest and had me always wondering what would happen next. I liked Jack's preplanned roe reversal.

WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

I would've liked to have seen a little more interaction between the brothers and Jack where I can see Jack's personal reasons for cooperating with the thieves, so that I can buy his involvement a little more. I would've also liked to have seen some more steps that Jack has taken to hedge his bet that he will outsmart the brothers. So that we can see how cleverly he planned this out. He obviously knew or had a strong hunch that they would betray him. Are there anymore steps he could've taken to prepare for that inevitability?

That's my two cents. Thanks for an entertaining read.

Dave
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