Great short story! A little dark but I think you meant for it to be. I would suggest forming more than one paragraph with the enter key so it is easier to read, but other than that you did well. I was able to follow along to the story well and you used descriptive words to help paint the picture in my head. Good job on this. :)
Wow, great story! This was easy to follow. I found this short story interesting and odd but odd in a good way. A lot of times I would come across chapters when randomly reviewing but it was nice to read a full story and not having to go to the profile to read 12 others first. :) What inspired you to write this?
Very interesting!!! I am going to view your profile to read the other two chapters. Honestly this is really good and well worded. I have issues with not knowing when to start a new paragraph and when to complete my sentences correctly. Doesn't seem like you have the same issue at all here. Great job on keeping track of dialog as well!
Wow, very nice indeed! This poem is powerful and very well worded. "The addiction is a beast, with an appetite for entire lives" is a well representation. What made you want to write this if you don't mind me asking? Did this happen to you or was it just something that came to mind?
I really like this. I enjoyed how you spelled some of the words to make it rhyme. This makes me want to know more about James, like his younger life and what lead up to this downfall for him. I think you did a great job on this poem and keep up the great work!
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