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Review of Choked up Words  
Review by Dreamward Bound
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good afternoon Ari's.Library,

Firstly I'd like to personally thank you for sharing this, and must commend you on taking the step to not only write this but publish as well. I'm not sure how long ago this was written, I do hope your condition has improved, this well and truly hit me, I must state that.

Now half a star is deducted, it could benefit from a touch up of formatting, though in the overall message of my review, that is trivial.

It struck me how relatable your use of words were, the authenticity of this work stands out so strong. My interest is drawn to works that is fueled by the author's personal experience during an emotional time, it feels tragic that this is a happenstance from such a traumatic time for you, but there is such beauty shown from a dark period.

As you well know, when a person is enduring this suffering, there's helplessness, loneliness, to the point where hope feels almost contradictory in the short term when looking for an escape. That sentiment is what keeps people trapped in a pit of despair, a torment that has degraded and even sadly taken the lives of so many people.

The line about constant regret, and the favouring of silence, I find these work in tandem, as one worsens the other, and precluding this, the loss of direction of where life should be at a present point.

To say I think this is really good feels like an understatement, the way you put this together, I hand on heart know you could help more people following this on. For anyone I know is suffering, I would take this poem you've done and bring it to there attention, because where my support might not cut through, I'd put money on that this right here would resonate.

You've taken an incredibly difficult situation and in despite of it; articulated the experience in a manor that can be used to instill hope in others going through similar circumstances. This is absolutely wonderful, and if you do not feel it already, may I say you should feel full of pride having put this out there for others to see.

Kudos to you, from the bottom of my heart, well done!

DB


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Review of Right VS Wrong  
Review by Dreamward Bound
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello to you!

I'm a big lover of philosophy, an instantaneously knew whoever had written this must be one heck of a critical thinker indeed. By your own admission, you felt it came off okay, I believe you can remedy this by tweaking the formatting. I'm super new here, giving an honest opinion, however, loved the message of what I believe to be the imperfect nature of human perception.

That there are opposing viewpoints, we have a uniquely skewed view of the world, yet if we appreciated the positive aspects in a unified fashion, the world would benefit from this.

After this review I'll check out your portfolio, if you have not already, I'd be eager to read a general thesis of yours that is not confined to the rhythmic structure of poetry. That is not said as a form of criticism, as I enjoyed this piece, this is more out of curiosity where your mind goes with a more open format, if you understand me.

Thank you for sharing this, I wish you all the best.

DB


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