I thought it interesting that your bio talked about your love of science fiction and the theme of flying came up several times in the letter... Then I got to the end and realized this /was/ science fiction. You did a great job of not tipping your hand but leaving enough intrigue to keep the reader motivated.
The only criticism I could venture to make is more of a stylistic preference... Personally, I'm all about the subtlety. The fact that the writer is nigh-immortal is made a little plain in the last few paragraphs... Perhaps the writer might wistfully detail past memories that are historically based? Or maybe make a few statements that seem like metaphors but could later be looked at literally? ("Time is like the Romans, marching inexorably forward..." or something of the like.)
In conclusion: Very nicely done.
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