You've created a fun and engaging world with superheroes, villains, and a touch of mystery (which I really liked). Judi and Beth are relatable characters with clear personalities and the story seems to move at a good pace (with action and dialogue that help keep the reader engaged). I guess if you had to add to your current story in some way, I'd say maybe using more vivid descriptions in some places. For example, instead of saying "Judi felt super-strength returning to her limbs," you could describe the sensations she experiences. Immerse the reader in a "show don't tell" type of way. I am a total newbie at writing, so who am I to give critiques lol. But I assume you, like me and the many people who have joined this site, wanted to hear feedback. Please feel free to review my stuff as well (I need it)!
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