I like the fact you clearly put thought into the topic and conveyed it into words within the prose style of writing. However, it's a hard read due to your choice of words.
Just a quick example. You wrote "with my fingers that have been tainted with lingering disappointment"
By getting rid of a few words, it flows better. "with my fingers tainted in lingering disappointment"
Hey Tess, I enjoyed reading your work, and went through it several times in order to place my own meaning behind it. I love metaphorical wording as it challenges the recipient to reflect upon you as the writer as well as their own experiences in life. What a great piece of work you have put down in writing for all to see. I am trying to broaden my ways and your work has influenced my way of expression. Thank you!!!
Reading your words and the format discription gave me a lot of information which I will use. A great learning lesson for me just in reading your work? Also, great poety!!!!!!!!
Wonderful piece - You could not have written this if you didn't feel this at one time. I hope you read some of my work and let me know what you think. I'm off to view your next.
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