This is such a cute poem! It has a sort of nursery rhyme feel to it....so cute!
In your first stanza I would recommend changing lines 3 and 4 slightly to improve the rhythm of the poem.
"Every night when the day was done" is sort of awkward when 2 words before you have used "night".
I think you could really improve line 4 simply by removing "quite" and just letting it be "she was always filled with fright".
Other than that, your rhyme scheme is fairly consistent and the flow is nice. Like I said, an adorable poem! Keep it up!!!
You have a way with words, that much is for sure! You definitely have talent. I can find myself getting lost in the wording. The rhyme scheme is inconsistent; as is metre although my first impression is that this is freestyle practice so those are not so important.
My question? "What is the theme of this poem?"
Keep it up. Very pretty.
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