Great Job! I like how you use practice in order to achieve proficiency instead of achieving a perfect state. Clearly, growth is better than being perfect. Would want to read more of your written articles soon.
A very light hearted written piece, giving us readers a glimpse of a beautiful couple. Also, I like how you spent time together as a couple. Particularly, watching old movies together and just spending time together.
~A strong introduction, indeed there is some truth in it. However, I wish that you could have focused on a certain topic about which part of feminism you wish to be solved. If I understood it correctly, you believe in a steady and firm change regarding the patriarchal system? Clearly, I would want to see what specific aspect of such system you wish to see a change on it first.
Definitely, this article could be appreciated by any reader regarding of their religion. :)
~Hello, this is the best non-fiction that I have ever read so far. It gave me as a reader a glimpse of what is happening between the two countries. Particularly, Saudi Arabia and India. About what needs to be improved and it is a good thing that they have discussed about the impact of terrorism. This piece of article gives a different perspective for us who have very few ideas about such countries.
~ Even if I personally have not experienced spring because I live in a tropical area, I would say that you have answered my question about what spring truly feels. If my understanding is correct, the best thing about spring is that it marks the ending of the old and the beginning of the new? Such written with clarity.
~ The author is definitely in love. As they say, such emotional depth will consume everything not only the soul of the individual yearning for love. Hopefully I can read more of your poems.
~ Well at least the main character tried his best to get back the love and affection of the woman that he admires. There is beauty in giving all of the love that you have without thinking if there is a possibility for it to be returned. In the end letting go of a hopeless endeavor after exerting efforts is still a noble and brave thing that a man can do.
A first time that I have read of a written short story that made me laugh and cry inside at the same time. Definitely a short story worth it of reading!
This is definitely one of the most sincere and beautiful poems that I have ever read.
It was written with so much freedom and clarity that it gives so many interpretations to readers, which I think makes the story even more interesting and captivating.
What I like about this is that it gives us readers what the author wants to discuss. Right at the beginning, it is very clear what you want to share with us. Also, I like the fact that it is as if you are narrating it to us your readers.
I just wish that there could have been another part of this interesting writing for more clarity.
As a conclusion, an interesting and a very intentional way to do a feedback.
Again, another beautiful literary piece. What I like is that you are not afraid to discuss the details of what was it like to live during Jane Austen's time. The horror of demand of being married to any man. Also, in the end you gave hope to the readers. Giving us another perspective, that there are women who chose not to listen to their father and instead listen to their hearts. Which was rare at that time. It is as if you have lived during that time.
Interesting, does this have another chapter or a second part?
For a scientific literary fiction, this is easy to read. Also, I like the fact that you also incorporated some action and mystery.
Will like to read more of your stories soon.
So many people are afraid of discussing mental health issues. It is as if it is wrong. What I like about this is that you characterized a psychological need as wings. There is a beautiful irony to it. You were not afraid to discuss what others are afraid to do so.
The line, "Even if her wings were returned, the physical mental scars would remain, always healing but never quite gone." really speaks a lot to me.
What they do not know is that we use our psychological needs as wings in order to lift ourselves up because we have no choice even if we just want to hide forever.
Such a very beautiful and breathtaking essay. Keep it up!
So much emotions were created inside of me as a reader, I have experienced personally what it feels to look into someone's eyes and ask if my love is enough and yet did not have the courage to ask.
This poem is so simple and yet it brought me back to a very beautiful and painful past that I thought I already forgot. Which is the message of this poem, the way how you repeated some lines add depth. It gives the reader an echo of heartbreak.
An interesting point of view from one of the characters in this story. What I like about this is that the first paragraph already established the tone and setting of the story.
How I wish that you could have elaborated more. Like, add another paragraph or elaborate more what "Big Daddy" did or what happened when they slept together. This could have given more emotions and depth to some readers.
Conclusion, a story that would want the readers to read more.
I have never read so far a story that I can relate to and at the same time, the story is unique. Also, you kept it straight to the point. Making the readers want to reread it several times in an easy manner.
Personally, I just wish that the story is a bit longer. Let us say, two or three more sentences will create more depth and clarity for us readers?
Positive points:
-it creates so much depth and emotion by using simple terms
-it creates an ironic feeling, a belongingness and emptiness at the same time
-the poem speaks of any kind of relationship
Points to improve:
-use different font or color for "Meet you on the other side" and "The forever sweet bye and bye" in order to create more emphasis and impact to the readers.
Overall: It is one of the most sentimental poems that anyone can relate to.
A poem that leaves so many interpretations to the readers. The poem gives the readers a sense of longing of the unknown at the same time readers can relate to it during times of uncertainty. Can't wait to read another poem of yours.
An elaborative story in a poem. The feelings of the writer can be read and felt by the reader. One of the poems that resonates so much depth and emotions. Written using both the mind and heart.
A first time to read a shadow in literature, the balance and contrast of the light and dark of the author's message is well written. Another thing that I admire is that usually, repeating words are frowned upon in literature. However, this is the first time that repeating words stirs the emotions of a reader. A well written poem.
Right at the beginning, I was already smiling. It is a first time to read a short story well elaborated and humorous while using a metaphor. Even if it is a short fiction story, the writer uses words denoting that such short story has a salt of reality.
This poem has a tone of the combination of the old and young generation. The rhymes of each stanzas sound pleasant to the ears if you hear it out loud. As a reader, I personally agree that everything comes in full circle.
What I like about this poem is that it shows the voice of both of characters. Giving the readers a different feeling of romance. It explains and shows at the same time.
What I like about the poem is that it is not just a poem but rather, you explained who Serena is. You gave us the readers a background about Serena and make her alive.
One final note, personally, I think that she is not alone when her mermaid friends are gone and only her dolphin friends are with her. Dolphins, just like our pets make us feel happy and contented even without our friends.
Will definitely read more of your Mermaid Series :)
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