Your poem provokes a thought of death and how life still remains. I'm no expert but was hoping for a smoother flow. Just one thought about Tears flowing down my cheeks
Weeping and gnashing my teeth
What do you think about.
Tears flowing down my cheeks
Weeping and gnashing of teeth
I think the (of) would allow it to flow better. Other than that keep up the good work.
The bond between a knife and it's manslayer revoke the intimate relationship that is spell bounding. The forbearing pattern you use clearly discribles your object and the emotions that tangle them together. Great Job!
What an eye opening contribution. Thank you for sharing the intimate realization of being a multiple. Understanding is knowledge we should grasp using the opinion of oneself. No one understands the true life of an individual by watching on the outside. Only by walking in one's shoes do we become aware of the burdens and joy they portray.
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