I liked this story, the invasion of the body snatchers sort of plot, it harked back to the old 70s paranoia horror film. The style of the story, wrote as a warning note, also was a nice little touch. You have a good grasp of grammer, and not once did i start to get bored whilst reading.....it happens a lot, trust me ha. The only detail that didnt ring true was the 'noooo' at the end of the piece, if someone was having their insides sucked out, i doubt they would have time to write that haha. Well done on a good story.
I really enjoyed the premise of your story, a library full of the books that were never written. If it were true i'm sure some of my wasted ideas would be in there ha. Your description of the old man and his dialogue too was a joy, im sure hes related to the old man who cleans the toilets at my workplace, because they sure sound the same ha. Keep up the good work.
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