This is a good start to something here. You captured my attention at the beginning. I am interested to see where you are going with it. You have good use of grammar and your spelling is good. I do think you should continue and see just how far you can take this. Let your imagination fly and produce something great. Nice work.
Hmm, I did like this quite a bit. It is a good start to something that could be spectacular. Your grammar and spelling are good, but there was a sentence that to me didn't read well. " A person in Chicago was admitted into the hospital, I don't know much of the details of this time because I really didn't pay attention too much to the news at that time." I believe the use of time in this sentece shouldn't be repeated. Just my humble opinion. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more from you in the near future.
Now for saying you don't write too well, you did a pretty fair job of it. I'm not a great poetry buff, but this one was pretty good. I'm sure poetry, like all other things improves with time, patience and practice. Keep up the good work, and keep writing. The more you write, the better you will get. Nice job.
Excellent job. Very nice wording. I could almost picture them out there. His wife playing and dancing the sun up. Good grammatically and spelling. I look forward to see other works by you in the near future. Keep up the good work and keep writing. Bravo.
Again I laugh. Interesting little tale to take my mind off of work and other chores. Nice job. Short and to the point. I always get a chuckle when I read your work. Especially since my own is so brooding some times. Thanks author for lightening my day.
I am starting to become more of a fan of poetry, though I would never try to write it myself. I like this one. Very nice content. Grammatically good and spelling is good. You have a very nice way with words. Keep on writing author. I look forward to reading future works from you.
Well, you've piqued my interest. I await to see where it goes next. Your grammar appears pretty good, and the spelling was good, I was a little confused if the character is speaking in the present tense, or if the story was being told from the past tense. I thought you changed there a couple of times. Nice work though. Keep on writing.
Wow! I really liked this. I liked the flow of it. The concept is terrific. I can't wait to read more of the back story on this one. Keep on writing. Excellent grammatically and spelling is good. I await the rest of the story with baited breath. Excellent job author.
I have read quite a bit of poetry since joinging writing.com. I do like this poem. Some of your grammar left me a little befuddled. I'm not sure what guilotiny is. It had good content though, and your spelling was pretty good. I would like to see more from you, and see how you advance over time. Nice job author.
Hmm! I'm not sure where to start on this one. I did like the concept. It was quite an outlandish story. Grammatically it was pretty sound. Spelling was good. The story was so far fetched, that I had to laugh all the way through it. I am interested to see what you can come up with next. Keep on writing.
This was a somewhat interesting concept. I felt like it could be one of those god-awful "B" movies that I do so love to watch. I do feel like I have watched something similar to this, but don't remember. Well written for the most part. Being from Tennessee, I enjoyed the part about the university. Not sure of the extent of their archaeology department, but that is of no consequence. I did like it, but I have read others by you that I liked better. Good job though. Keep plugging away.
What a cute little poem. I could actually imagine myself reading this to a child. I think if you had enough poems like this, you could have yourself a childrens book. For what it is worth, I enjoyed it. Keep plugging away and I think you could have the makings of some very nice childrens fare. Bravo.
I love the horror genre. An interesting tale, and a concept that I haven't seen before. It is refreshing to see new ideas come to life. Grammatically sound and your spelling is good. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more from you in the future.
Nice start. This has the potential to be an epic story. I could see this one going quite far, limited only by your imagination author. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to further installments of this tale. You seem to be grammatically sound and your spelling is good. You've captured my attention, now let's see if you can deliver the goods.
I know this is supposed to be short, but I think you had a decent concept, you just didn't push it the way you could have. There were a few grammatical errors and some minor spelling errors, but overall, it was sound. I would recommend painting your picture a little more, and letting your reader infer some things, rather than just right out telling them. It can make for a much nicer read. Something I am having to learn myself. Keep up the good work, and keep polishing your skills.
I like the premise of the story, even though it is an oft told tale. This work was well written and grammatically sound. I would have liked to have seen a little more of a twist to it, but, it was quite good as it is. Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more from you in the near future.
I do like your story. Unfortunately, this type of thing is more and more common in many homes. Spousal abuse is a disturbing subject, and while your story had a somewhat happy ending, at least for Jess, that isn't always the case. Nice job of tackling a touchy subject. Keep up the good work. Spelling was good. Content was good. Premise was good.
I liked this one a lot. Very nice concept. Cleverly written and well thought out. I commend you author. You have brightened my day, or perhaps made it a little darker with your tale. Either way, it was a good read. Keep up the good work. I look forward to more. I noticed a couple of slight grammatical errors, but other than that, top notch.
Whew! There was a lot going on in this story. I like your work. You make for an exciting read. I do have a couple of questions. First, what happened to Jill from the beginning of the story? I expected her to be one of the main characters. You made mention of her sneaking a knife on the plane, and then later in the story, she has a gun. How did she manage that one? I like the concept. It just jumped around a bit. Keep up the good work. Keep writing away. I enjoy all your work. One other quick thing. Watch some of your grammar. There was a spot where you talked about people being impelled. The actual word is impaled. Just trying to be helpful. Thanks again for the read.
My cup of tea exactly. I love horror and suspense. This is the first opportunity I have had to read your work, but I must say it is quite good. I enjoyed it immensely, and would love to read more from you. I love a good spooky tale. Something to read at night alone. You've captured my imagination, now bring on more. Nice job author.
You were kind enough to peruse Going, Going, Gone for me, so I thought I would return the favor. I won't lie and say I completely understood everything you wrote, but you did have some nice symbolism in your tale. I liked your opening line, and at first glance thought this might be a horror story, but after reading further, I knew it wasn't. I think that you have some skill, and that with a little honing, you can be an excellent writer. Keep up the good work, and keep crafting your talents. I look forward to reading more.
Wow! I feel like I just ran a marathon in the short time it took to read this. Very nice work. Your use of symbolism is quite good. Grammatically sound and your spelling is good. This is the first time I have read your work, but when I find authors I like, I try to read more from them. Keep on writing, my mind awaits. Nice job author.
As anyone who has ever read one of my reviews knows, I love horror fiction. I haven't read any of your work previously, but I'm afraid this one left me wanting a little more. I know it was supposed to be short, but I would have liked just a little bit something extra from you. There was a lot of potential here, it just didn't come through. Watch your grammar and spelling. A couple of places I had to re-read to understand. All in all, a solid effort. I'm certain you can really put something out spectacular, when you try next time. I commend the effort you made though.
I'm not much of a fan of poetry per se, but I have found several on writing.com that I like, and for me, this was one of the best. You painted such a picture with your words. It was very well written and left me wanting to read more of your work. Outstanding effort author. Excellent in every aspect.
I had reviewed a previous work of yours and enjoyed. This I enjoyed as well. You paint a very vivid picture with your words. I wonder how many of us have had thoughts along the same line as your character? Of course, hopefully they didn't come to fruition as hers did. Nice and to the point. Bravo. Excellent job once again.
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