This poem is very cute and very sweet. It makes me want a baby of my own. In the line "My job again is to just play" it sounded a bit off to me. I think that "My job again is just to play" would sound better.
This story was very beautiful and haunting. The flow of the story seemed choppy in spots. In the first papragraph I think that "dwelling in the past" would sound better. In the second paragraph instead of repeating Stacy you could just say that "nobody cared about her". I would strongly suggest uping the rating of this story to 18 because of the issues with abuse and sucide.
The poem was very moving. I like the Lord of the Rings movies and thought that this was great. The poem was choppy in places and I felt that the lines should have be combined together or seperated at times like "And yet cold. The sky," I felt that The sky, should have been moved down. In the third part it is Northwest not NorthWest.
I really liked your short story. It was very moving and brought up a very good point about standing up when you see something that is wrong. This story made me wonder what will happen to those two people after the end of the story. The only part that was not as good was the first paragraph it was kinda of boring and did not flow as well as the rest of the story.
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