Wow -- As a Christian, I found the content very interesting and was surprised by the ending, since it was fictional. There is a heaven and I believe that "All Dogs go to Heaven", as the movie title says. You got a lot of bad information through life and sure needed the "light of Heaven" to be shown on your dark picture.
The writing is good. It kept my interest all the way through. I did not expect the ending as it came, even to the time that you saw Zero. I gave it a 4.0 because of the unrealistic ending. I think, if anything, you should have stopped with Zero coming for you and then let the reader determine if Zero came from Heaven or the Black eternity.
If you have some time, could you read and critique my first chapter of my book? It is the only Static that I have.
CathyJo
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