This is great, the only reason that i held back half a point is the repetition of the word Judgment and Judging in the third to last stanza. I think it would be more effective if you were to switch either one of the terms, but this is just a subjective suggestion.
I like the honesty in the last stanza and how you don't just point the finger at another, but include yourself in the mix of this most important aspect of people's image of God as seen through the proclaimed worshiper.
Enjoyed the read!
Thanks!
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