I think the only thing I take exception to with this piece is your qualification that it's "bad." Bravo! The cadence of the poem pulls the reader into the longing and desperation of the narrator. While some find broken hearts and unrequited love to be cliche, I enjoy reading poems like yours because we can all relate and we've all felt that way at one point or another.
I love your imagery and the ironic contrast of the first line of your stanzas "If only I could paint." The contradiction is amusing as you have clearing painted your reader a picture, just using the medium of words instead of paint.
I think the last stanza was my favorite: "In a world that demands deftness with colour/I remain shades of grey clenching words/of love that will always fall flat at your feet." Beautiful metaphor.
With a little revision to tighten the language, I think this piece has a lot of potential. Nice job.
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