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Review of That Night  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
whoa, I want to read more, what is that blob? Is it coming to eat..the diner? The town?
Please let me know when you add to this. Im curious to see what happen.
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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
it was different but there was one or two misspellings. Said not sayed. not sure if you were just typing fast or not.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
ooh. What happened to the body? Is he really dead? what made bud sick? Could the body be the result of exposure to the gas and what if it wasnt really laughing gas. I am curious about the girl that told them about the body in the first place, was she a real person or did she disappear?
I want to read more this was great
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Wow. this was very interesting. i like the imagery. although I do wonder, who this young maiden was. nice write
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Rated: E | (4.0)
wow. talk about sibling rivalry gone wrong. I understand a little of how Sarai feels. its hard to live in someone's shadow especially when you are twins. Parents dont often realise how this can effect the other child. I am curious to see how Sarai interacts with her parents. Do they treat her different because she's less powerful? are they mean to her? i want to read more to know why Sarai so willingly goes dark
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Review of No mind no soul  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Interesting view, to have a brain, a heart and eyes but still arent able to see the world. I almost feel sorry for this person
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice. I liked this told a story. Very good. I do wonder how old Sarah is.
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Review of Kian I  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
wow. that was spicy. I liked this but is Kian a set of conjoined twins? I was a little confused by the use of they when you were talking about Kian's escapade.
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Review of Sleepless Nights  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
i have had this feeling recently. that is definitely what i was feeling during that time.
I am glad to be over this but i will never forget the mess i was then. this captures the feeling perfectly.
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Review of Taking My Leave  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
is the main character a sniper or an assassin? what is the reason for this killing and who else has he killed besides the body on the floor and the guard?

I want to keep reading to find out what happens.
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Review of Summer Solstice  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the flow of this poem. I t reads like a spoken word piece.
the comparison of the seasons and civilizations is a cool concept.

I enjoyed reading this. great job
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Review of the melt  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
its short sweet and to the point.
This poem also sounds like you were watching someone exercising in the cold.
I really like the imagery.

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Review by chcltroses Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
hi Izzy,
I am Leah, and i will be reviewing your story.

I really like this story overall. There were a few things i was wondering about. I see that nicky is the big brother of the three kids. does he have a disability too? some of his behavior has me wondering if he's like his little sister, or not.
I have never had a big brother, but i am a big sister. i can relate to his worry about his little sister. How is relationship with his younger brother? does he work or have a life outside of hockey?
i think you should mention more about what he does when he isnt with his family and izzy. I love the relationship they have though.
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