Really sad! :( But I loved it! The detail was really good and the story was written very well! I liked it! I do just wish there could've been more detail about how upset she was that he never showed..
Honestly, this poem was very confusing. The word choice in general was all over the place. it seemed like nothing fit where you had put it. I think this poem could have potential but it seemed as if you just through words together. now, please don't think I'm being rude. I'm trying not to be. but, how did your poem fit the title? What was your mindset when you wrote this? I'm just trying to understand what you meant. My mind is blown when trying to understand this. It was alltogether confusing.. Sorry
I thought the overall message was good. Overall, I liked the poem. The rhyme honestly through me off a little. I think that poem was meant to be on the darker, more depressing side. And though it was still good, the rhyme made it sound a little sing-songy. I think that the rhyme weakened the meaning and that maybe other word choices could've really made the emotion stand out. But, I still liked it (:
I can really feel the pain you were going through. The word choice you used was really good. I think that maybe there could've a few improvements to really make it stand out. But other than I liked it. :)
I thought the imagery was very good. I especially liked when you wrote, "Age is always lurking in the darkest corner. Awaiting to squash my childhood , my teens, my twenties." i could really visualize this when I was reading it.
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