This is adorable. It gives an image of a child sneaking down to catch Santa on Christmas Eve. Your use of rhythm is well done, but it feels like it stumbles in a few places. I can see this being popular with children at the holidays.
There is a lot of feeling and emotion in this piece. I found the rhythm to be easy to read. I did find the last two lines to be confusing but overall I enjoyed this.
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