Oh, my! Now I can't quit crying long enough to write this! This was absolutely beautiful. My sister is an author on here, too and I can't wait to share this one with her! I've only read two of your items, and am already a fan. I gave you five stars, but wish I could have gone higher. Good luck to you and Jack. Obviously he does have a guardian angel. Keep the poems coming..PLEASE!
Nice flow! I'm really picky, but seems like the third stanza could use a few word changes to keep the flow just right. Maybe "...self destructive fire" could be put up against "desire". I hate when people change my poems, but some like the advice. I DO love this, though. It can work on so many levels in a relationship. Just curious, but do you write music to go along with your lyrics? Bet it sounds great if you do! If not, maybe you should find someone to do that. Good luck! I'll check out your portfolio later to see what else you have.
This was amazingly enchanting!!! This would make a beautiful children's book. With the Rainbow Dragon taking them on all kinds of adventures...flying them to new lands, meeting new friends, and having all types of wonderful adventures. Honestly, I can see this being the new version of Harry Potter. You have to get this started as a book! I'm begging you, as a fellow writer, you have to share this with the children of the world! Be careful out there when you look for a publisher, though. I've run into too many scams. When you get this published, I WANT TO KNOW! I'll buy the first book...HONESTLY!!
cdzlvr
PS- The ONLY thing I'd change about this story...the TOOTH FAIRY as the cousin. It just doesn't seem to fit, for some reason. It kind of "broke the spell" for me...but only for a second!
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