Oooooh I utterly love this. Even though the 9th Doctor isn't my favorite, I still adore him. You certainly brought these character alive with your words. You have a great choice of words that suck the reader in. The only thing I would edit is the format of the story like combining a couple of the lines to make it a paragraph. :)
I really love this story. I wish that you would do more with it! I want to know how it ends. :) The only thing I would edit is the beginning two sentences, "It was spring. A glorious spring!" Perhaps blend the two, because it really doesn't catch the eye. Maybe something like, "It was a glorious spring after a cold, rough winter." Other then that, the paragraph is intriguing. :)
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