This is lovely! I tend to write in a similar style, so this was an easy read for me!
A few things:
Capitalize proper nouns (ex: Sharpie, Big Apple)
Watch out for confusing punctuation; ex: "The photo held three people, himself a woman and a man the two people he was closest to when he was growing up." First, this is a run-on. Second, it's treading on misinterpretation territory. Reminds me of humorous sentences like, "Let's eat grandpa" vs "Let's eat, grandpa". One of those makes you psychotic :) It's that naggy Oxford comma that some people dislike. I'm a fan, lol.
"he did not have much time for people plus there were other reasons they grew apart." -- this sentence doesn't seem to move the piece along, though I get where you're going with it. The intent of that paragraph isn't lost if it's not there, but perhaps a rework would make it fit better.
"she looked older and more women" -- she looked more womanly. Unless she somehow looks like multiple women as she's aged ;)
""Not do I," he said as he left." Did you mean nor?
Occasional punctuation is needed, especially with clauses and appositives. Some commas could be semi-colons.
Sorry if this was overly thorough; I used to be an English teacher :) I really enjoyed this one :) Happy writing!
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