This poem is touching and I like it :) . It has good rhythm and rhyming and is very thought provoking. I feel like this poem 'flows' quite well, sometimes you get poems that are very abrupt and jaunty but this one is pretty good. I like the ending when it's revealed that the other man is the father, it makes it all the more sentimental
I enjoyed reading this monologue, you're right, so often we get random people knocking on our doors and interrupting our lives mid-stream. I personally don't particularly like people (lol) so I usually don't open the door. My parents also don't open the door for fear of burglary. I think you have a nice casual way of writing and it's easy to engage with.
Just leaving some feedback - I think this article is interesting. It's informative and make several arguments towards the influence of technology. I think your topic is something that is heavily debated nowadays and is something that is becoming more and more important. Your article for me was very engaging and I found it easy to 'get in' to it.
It's my first time doing an interactive story and I really like the idea! The story itself is well - written and well thought out. It took me a bit of time to get into it at the beginning but this resolved itself as I read on. I think I will consider writing a new chapter! But another day maybe!
Just leaving some feedback for your poem. I think the layout of your poem is really good, it's simple yet easy to understand My favourite part would be when the butterfly finally flies away and the symbolism surrounding it. I think the descriptions make it easy to imagine the scene and surroundings.
I'm doing a spot of reviewing on this sunny evening and I thought I'd leave you some feedback. Reading this piece brings back feelings of nostalgia for me - I used to do horseriding when I was smaller and like you, I really loved it too. There's just something so different and almost magical about being on a horse. I think this piece is a good account of your experience, and as far as I can see no grammatical or spelling errors, so it's easy to read/understand.
I was doing some reviewing work and came across your piece. I think it's quite good - it's informative and easy to read, and as far as I can see there are no spelling or grammatical errors. Spacing is done well and the bullet point format at the end keeps it simple yet to the point.
It's so hot here so I'm hiding at home trying to cool down and doing reviews! Okay so your poem - I think it has nice spacing and as far as I can see no spelling or grmammatical errors. It's easy to read and understand - sometimes you come across poem with words that are so vague and hard to make sense of , but I understood everything here. I think I reviewed one of your works recently and this is one is very good too ! keep writing take care
Just leaving some feedback for your poem. I think you have a really nice way of writing - it's easy to read yet engaging. The comparisons like 'dog' is good for imagery and creating a picture of what you're saying. Nice spacing and pacing during the poem, good rhythm.
I was reading your poem and decided to leave some feedback. I like this poem, the style of writing is really intriguing and it makes me want to read more. I think the layout is very clever and it catches the readers eye. No grammar mistakes as far as I can tell so yay!
Hi just leaving you some feedback for your poem. I think your poem is very inspirational, it's honest and encouraging and having had some setbacks in my life, I think it is something I can relate to. So often we are impatient and we want to succeed immediately, but things take time and it's important to be mindful of that..
It's a sunny sunday evening and I am doing a spot of reviewing. I like your poem, I would say that it is a bit short but perhaps you will write more? I think your use of adjectives is very good here and it helps the reader imagine the fiery bird and the landscape.
I love your style of writing. I think it's interesting and easy to read. The layout of the poem is also very effective as this helps set the atmosphere for the poem. The last line about updating your status before dying is very clever - because we are all slaves to technology in a way ( i am typing on my laptop as i speak! ) and it is important to realise the effect of technology and social media on our lives and livelihood
Once upon a time there was a purple fairy. Everyday,she went out in search of her purple wand, which she lost a few summers ago. One day,she happened upon a green gnome, muttering angrily to himself.She stopped and asked him if he was okay. Because of that,he told her of his problems and worries about his baby gnome son - Gospel. He talked and talked and talked.The purple fairy wanted to leave but she didn't want to seem rude by bolting when the gnome was confiding in her. So she kept listening and tried her best to stay awake. Until finally,the exhaustion became too much and the purple fairy fell to the ground with a Splat! and fell fast asleep. If you, really listened, you could even hear her snore.
It's a sunny afternoon and being the usual hermit I am I decided to do some reviewing! I like your poem. I myself write some poetry so it's lovely to hear from other people. I like how you used the ocean as a metaphor for yourself and your family's lives.
It's also easy to read which makes it easier for me to engage with.
This poem brings me back to my childhood. I think you have captured the care free life of the child very well. There is also a lot of imagery in this poem, such as the gritty hands, the slathering the sun cream, and the lying in the sun. I think I've actually reviewed your work before and this is just as good! The weather where I am at the moment is very nice so this poem is reminding me of that.
I think our poem is very good. It's touching and it covers a topic that is getting more and more relevant every day. I have friends who have mental health problems and I know I do too sometimes. I think we can all learn a lot from reading poems like yours and I would love to read more of your work.
I was doing some reviewing on this sunny afternoon ( very rare in Ireland! ) and I happened upon your poem. I think it's interesting - despite it only being ten words it makes an impact on the reader. Addiction is such a prevelent problem in today's society and it's nice to hear someone's opinion on it. Thank you
My name is bubblebear (don't laugh) and I was doing a spot of reviewing when I came across your poem. I'm aware that this was a competition piece so I will keep that in mind for the review.
First of all I love the layout of your poem - I think it's really eyecatching and also the font makes it stand out. I think the poem is really thought provoking and intriguing. I think the poem contains a lot of imagery and this is really good when trying to engage the reader.
I really like this poem! I find it very relatable. Sometimes I walk down the street and some random ruffian will shoulder me as I walk by. I'm not sure if this actually happened in your real life, but either way I like it. It's easy to read and thoroughly engaging. Let's hope we don't meet more people like the ones you met! Unless they're that nice man. that's ok
I am doing a spot of reviewing on this sunny sunday afternoon and I came across your poem. I am intrigued - your poem deviates from the usual type of poetry I read. It seems to be laden with metaphors which I really like. I love poems that are thought provoking and this one certainly is. I think it highlights an important quality that we all need - perseverance. Many times people quit after only a few tries wheras often we need to keep going and try again and again.
it's a sunny saturday here in Ireland and I decided to do a spot of reviewing. I like your story, I actually haven't read your other chapters so I can only give feedback on this one I'm afraid. So I feel like your story is easy to understand. It has good, clear dialogue which made it easy for me to engage with. I am intruiged with the ending and I look forward to reading more of your work.
I'm actually starting to write a book too! so exciting! okay so my thoughts on your piece - I think the school setting is good. I think maybe if you had longer sentences it would flow better? But that is just my opinion so whatever you fancy :)
This poem is very casual and care- free . I like how it captures the excitement of childhood and the innocence that comes with it. In my opinion the poem is well paced. sometimes you get people writing a chunk of stuff and it's hard to read because it's all squashing together. No grammatical errors which is good.
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