A very interesting story idea. i enjoyed the different pathways you could explore. I would love for more to be added and i look forward to reading more about it. Maybe add some details from other adult themes such as BDSM, pain and humiliation role playing.
I loved the character of Nel. I wish there was more added to it. There could have been more detail, and you could explain more about the setting and characters. All and all I did enjoy the story and would love to read more keep up the good work mate.
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