Brilliantlly done! I was very impressed by the opening - "The Book " and was glad that you had decided to proceed with it as is. This section has the same tight pacing and great character development. I love the rock star-god/ religious frenzy that you're employing in this. Perfect pairing of character(s) and plot vehicle. I loved the characterizations of the band members and manager. Perfect touch! I'm very much looking forward to reading more.
Well done. Nice pacing with an interesting an d compelling opening. My only criticism is to work on how Jacob's accent is shown in the dialouge. Other than that I'm anxious to read more.
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