This is really cute! I love how exact it parallels an real recipe. Great word choice throughout. My only suggestion would be to edit some punctuation. The content itself is awesome.
Great thoughts here! I think these are really relatable concepts. You have something great to work with here; maybe dig a little deeper? Possibly play with breaking up a few of the longer lines? Just some suggestions to play with. Good work!
This is a great way to honor the memories you shared with your mother. I love all the details. Your word choice was very good and the way you broke up the stanzas was excellent. My only correction is in the last few lines, it should say "Now it is ready" instead of "Now it it ready".
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