A creative writing sparkles the reader's imagination. You did that with your story. You knew how to begin (one of the most difficult things) and how to attract the reader's attention until the end of the story (the second most difficult thing or maybe the first and only). I experienced a lot of emotion while reading WITHIN and you triggered feelings kept in secret spaces within me. Good writing style and plot, excellent description of what seems to be the many mysteries of the spiritual realm beyond, and of spiritual issues and Mediums. You felt it; you wrote it. Congratulations.
BLUE KNIGHT
Today most people no longer think of the devil as much but there are still many people who believe that the devil exists, that he wields immense power for evil (some say he is a fallen angel) and is constantly trying to destroy the work of God among men and women. They think it is the devil that secretly whispers in your ear and tempts you to evil. Of course there are real difficulties about accepting such an idea. If the devil was a real angel to begin with, how ever did he come to revolt against God? And why does God allow a human being to destroy His work in the earth? Where is the devil now, anyway? And how can he really work? Your story made me think about all this. Great read. I enjoyed the story very much. Blue
I would like to congratulate you, chrisdaltro, on this extraordinary work. It is flawless. It was a great read and sarcastic enough to its sad reality, brutality and violence to mankind. A story that is History, to be often read, for sure. I liked the last sentence very much, you did very well there, it made it perfect to me. Your writing style is different and captivating. Good work. BLUE KNIGHT
Your ideas, characters, imagination, places and plots are outstanding. I really don't care for spelling and or typos, I just want to come to writing.com once in a while and read stories. Yours are different and you are really talented. Your stories make me think of distant places and weird people and this is what reading is all about, right? This one was scary, though. Was it true? It looks real for me. I love these types of stories about Voodoo. Nice job. BLUE
I AM IMPRESSED, THIS IS A WORK OF ART. WE MUST NEVER FORGET THE HOLOCAUST - A WORD OF GREEK ORIGIN MEANING "SACRIFICE BY FIRE" AND WHAT THE NAZI REGIME DID TO SIX MILLION JEWS. BLUE KNIGHT
I am sorry but for a static item, a short story (and being psychology), it's a far toooo long pf a story, maybe repetitive at times and too much for the reader. Make it shorter. I saw no bizarre trip into truth and fiction. I liked Jorge, though. Write on. BLUEKNIGHT
Interesting dialog between spirits and the spiritual point of view oif life, fate, destiny, reincarnation and redemption. I enjoyed it very much. Write on! KNIGHT.
Extraordinary way of showing fate, destiny of signs. We never see them. I often wonder what would have happened to me if I had "read" the signs that appeared in front of me.
Good work. BLUE
Really fantastic. Yes, what is life but an angle of vision and you, depicted it right here, in this story. I could feel its change. The story was real. I really enjoyed the read. BLUE
I am so impressed with this story that I can't stop thinking about its impact on me, its force and power! It's sad and beautiful. More people should read this! I am impressed! Its true and shocking, realistic and it is a poem to unborn children. Congratulations. BLUE
I thought this story was written with passion and creativity. The wasy you described the eye doctor - before and after - was superb. Keep on writing. BLUE
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