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Review of Dear World  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good Letter to the world. It shows how much we can do by just doing good in your corner of the world. It also shows how we depend on eachother by every action we do in this world. Of course we are connected. That should alone bring a sense of responsiblity to do best as we can. But then again we shouldn't be conscientious of this all the time. It'll just wear us out. "Live well and laugh long" is a good quote if I were to summarize your work. Good job!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This story is good. It takes a whie to get into it. I believe that you have the potential to make this an engrossing novel. There is one thing that it lacks. It lacks coherence in one sentence. When the guard N'shyi smiled at Zillian, and after Zillian says thank you, Zillian should have said something like "Now I must be off." because it suddenly jumps from Zilian being on the floor recuperating from the blizzard to going into the city.
Otherwise, this was very good. I enjoyed it. If you ever finish the book, let me know, I want to read it.
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