Nice, short, concise in the point wanting to be made.....I really liked this short piece.....job well done....
As others have told me, I tell you - keep writing, keep writing, keep writing - writing gives us a unique freedom from a variety of things, people and places.
Not sure where the title Communication comes in, unless it relates to the two sides of the knife blade.
I do see the line you followed and how some lines can so easily fall in more than one direction.
I find this poem interesting in the number of emotions it touches on.
I also find this poem a little confusing as to where it was going, but it does make a point for those who hear voices and fight their inner demons on a regular basis.
Interesting....way to use the power of our own insecurities to show how we make judgements on those we think are very different from us.....
At first I felt you left the reader hanging at the end, but in re-reading the last couple of paragraphs I then realized you finished in the best way you could.....
Look forward to reading some of your works again....thanx
More along my kind of poetry....ones with a basic count and rhyme.......
I like how you bring the reader along with what appears to be a trip, then zap us into what was a dream.....a dream of hope, the kind of hope you needed when facing such adversity......
With the exception of a couple of lines that almost seemed out of step, very well written....thanx for sharing.
I felt like I misstepped part way through.....you made some great points to think about.....last bit was a notch out of joint, you lost the ryhme......
Continue to plug on your mind will release itself with the pen....
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