Content: interesting story. Could be used as a small part of a larger story, perhaps the opening?
Spelling, grammar, etc: Grammar was great. Personally, I wished for more periods and fewer commas. It felt a little too much like a huge run-on sentence. I would try reading it aloud and put punctuation in exactly how you speak it.
This is fun! Very original. I noticed a few typos in the opening statement. "Their's" should be "theirs", "nessicary" should be "nessisary", and "seems" should be "seem". Other then that, good work.
The one thing I would add would be to tell readers which way your post goes. That way they know to knock the top poster off the hill, not the bottom one.
Keep on writing!
Del
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