Wow! As I was reading this story, I questioned to myself what was going to happen. I was thinking maybe someone wouldn't be dead or maybe there would be something strange in one of the bodies. I never really considered that she would know someone who was pulled into the room. It was even a greater shock that it was her family. I didn't see anything which really needed changed. I felt that the story was just right. You gave the reader the right amount of information and didn't give too much of unnecessary information. Would love to read more of your work. :)
What a wonderful and intriguing story. I only got to read the first half during my first session at the computer and it was the first thing I started reading when I came back to the computer. I was drawn into what was happening to the characters and never would have guessed that he was killed the mother until the moment came. I love the idea that the little girl was able to bring items back from the dead and this is what led to her death and in the end, I assume, his own.
I had to read your story the moment I read what it was about. I am kinda facing the same dilemma. I have half-brothers and sister who I never met and I've been considering contacting them since my father passed away almost 2 years ago. This story perfectly describes the feelings and thoughts which go through my head and I think goes through theirs.
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