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12 Public Reviews Given
12 Total Reviews Given
Favorite Genres
Crime, Fantasy, Adventure, Action, Thriller
Least Favorite Genres
Romance, although I will review it unbiasedly, I just prefer not to
Favorite Item Types
Chapters, Short Stories, Poems
Public Reviews
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Review by J Crone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I really like Faldashir. He's probably my favorite so far. I really enjoy it. The story has me hooked already! Is Chapter 4 ready yet?

I didn't see any major problems. Would probably have to go over it again to find any mistakes, but at first glance I saw none. :)
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Review by J Crone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed this! I love how you made something magnificent out of something as menial as gardening. (Although quite enjoyable, some do not agree)

I like how you changed up the line lengths. It made it flow surprisingly well.

I also really like the ending. Haha. Kind of made me giggle.
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Review of Quiet  Open in new Window.
Review by J Crone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I was good, I relate to it in a small way. I sometimes get shy, and I have no idea why. The only thing I would say to change is the line that reads,
"All my vulnerability."

If you add 'of' between 'all' and 'my' so it would read

"All of my vulnerability."

It would flow a lot better. That extra syllable allows the flow to not be as harsh as it does right now.
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Review of Two Mothers  Open in new Window.
Review by J Crone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was beautiful! It shows the idea of adoption as something magnificent instead of what some put it down for. Worded masterfully and easy to read. I love how it flowed and seemed to move back and forth in a motion, like a flower swaying in a breeze.
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Review by J Crone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I can relate to this so much. It was beautifully written and it spoke to me. I use to feel this way and it has taken me a long time to change. I wouldn't change anything about it, although I think you may have a simple mistake in the 4th line. I feel like a word is missing.
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Review by J Crone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very good! I look forward to Chapter 3!
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Review by J Crone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm very intrigued. I love the way it's written and it keeps me pulled in.
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Review of Writer's Block  Open in new Window.
Review by J Crone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow. That's all I can say... Wow.

Reading this was probably the best thing I could have done today, it was magnificent and dark and beautifully written. The description and the raw feelings were unimaginative. Bravo.
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Review of Keep me safe  Open in new Window.
Review by J Crone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This... was... phenomenal. I was captivated.
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Review of Sweet Anna  Open in new Window.
Review by J Crone Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love how you wrote this, it flows really well. I look forward to reading more.
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