I really enjoyed this! I love how you made something magnificent out of something as menial as gardening. (Although quite enjoyable, some do not agree)
I like how you changed up the line lengths. It made it flow surprisingly well.
I also really like the ending. Haha. Kind of made me giggle.
I was good, I relate to it in a small way. I sometimes get shy, and I have no idea why. The only thing I would say to change is the line that reads,
"All my vulnerability."
If you add 'of' between 'all' and 'my' so it would read
"All of my vulnerability."
It would flow a lot better. That extra syllable allows the flow to not be as harsh as it does right now.
This was beautiful! It shows the idea of adoption as something magnificent instead of what some put it down for. Worded masterfully and easy to read. I love how it flowed and seemed to move back and forth in a motion, like a flower swaying in a breeze.
I can relate to this so much. It was beautifully written and it spoke to me. I use to feel this way and it has taken me a long time to change. I wouldn't change anything about it, although I think you may have a simple mistake in the 4th line. I feel like a word is missing.
Reading this was probably the best thing I could have done today, it was magnificent and dark and beautifully written. The description and the raw feelings were unimaginative. Bravo.
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