Enjoyed reading this story about a dragon slayer and dragon. It had a unique plot that I've never read before. I found the sentence structure to be good throughout. Felt the ending should have been at the beginning, because I found the Dragon to be more important to the story and more enjoyable than the dragon slayer. It could have worked as well to have the Dragon as the main character, since she was given inner dialogue and feelings about the dragon slayer. This is a fantasy story, and this would have been acceptable to the reader and not out of place, if the reader reads a lot of fantasy stories.
Overall, great plot and characters. Thanks for letting me read your story.
Just a slight suggestion, to include Oreo in the first line, such as' Oreo, my wonderful tuxedo cat'.
But it's not necessary. It's a beautiful poem as is. I lost my kitty last year, and I still miss her. She was so sweet and loving. They are the best friends we can ever have. Thank you for letting me read your poem.
I really like how brushing teeth is prominent in this story. I just got a kitten so teeth brushing is new to me, lol. He kind of likes it, but not really. Almost all of his teeth are in already!
I also like how the scent of Ginger is used, too. A cute story that parents would like to read to their children, or that a child would like to read. Good job!
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