You know I like how you have a different variety of options on this interactive story, But I don't really like how you haven't added more chapters onto any of these options. I have on the other hand added some chapters if you wanna read them. I don't know if you'll like them or not but I hope you do add onto one of these stories eventually. I would like to see how well you can tell a story.
So far this story sounds good, I wouldn't mind reading more if you put more in it. I am curious if there is a reason for the sex division of the pups or if that is just part of the story. I really hope that you continue on with this story though because I would definietly read it afterwards.
This version of the story of Gwen filling up with gold is quite interesting and I kind of like it. Keep up the good work. Also I put in my version of Gwens Adventures if your interested in it. https://www.writing.com/main/interact/item_id/1808... Here is the link to it, I hope you enjoy it.
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