You need to resize this piece. It does not fit properly into the writing.com display page. This makes it nearly impossible to read. As a side note never play yourself down to your audience before they get a chance to make their own oppinions. Often we are tougher on ourself than needed.
May the ink always flow from your pen
Rachel
I find this piece "Ray Bradburyesque". I loved it. found it positively thrilling. I enjoyed the fact that it followed the cycle of wars in the world. It shows how people often do not learn from their mistakes quickly enough. It would seem these days that we truly are on the cusp of a great change. For the better or worse is yet to be seen. I find myself tipping my hat to the opinions of the end.
Thank you
Rachel
To love life and the pursuit of unhappiness. Amazing how alike strangers can be. I know what its like to realize one day that your not as ok as you thought you were. Poem read smoothly i enjoyed it. Thanks!
This work seems to want to show a great deal of pain. However the opening line is misleading. It leads the reader to believe this poem is going to be about "them" people in plural and then is about one person "I" this leaves me to believe the subject was picked simply because it is disturbing. For me this causes the piece to loose credibility.
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