Good use of adjectives to describe the dragon... there seems to be more to the gentleman than meets the eye though... is this where the story leads? Unfortunately, this contest does not let more words into it... if so, readers would be compelled to find out more about the dragon and the man and the relationship that would not doubt develop. However, this contest will probably find that this dragon is somewhat very similar to others. If I were you, I would add something, some sort of mystique, to your dragon, that draws the gentlemen to "find" the dragon in the first place. It would be a simple, yet magnetic sort of pull that would add charisma to it that might set it off just so. I quite liked this one compared to the others. It was just - well, simple enough to grab my attention and wanting more. I kept waiting for more to happen. : )
What a twist! Cute way of talking out the characters and introducing them! Your readers "almost" know what to expect but not entirely. Every writer would love to have that ending happen for them! I know I would!! Wow!
Cute! This should be something that should be added into the fairytales and rhymes book that we read to our kids at night! That was simply endearing!! Great Story!
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