Hi MK,
You're almost there :) but i think your poem is in there, there in the level of good poem :)
The poem has few words but the scope of meaning is wide from what i think since wishing to be free to reach your dreams is broad.
I just notice that the first and second stanza there is rhyme and then the following...has nothing? why? (but I do appreciate your work
I just love rhyming)
But since the meaning of the poem is good, my overall rate is nice :)
"Stay" a sad word when you're saying it to someone and you know that he/she won't.
For me the structure of the poem is fine and there's a rhyme too so I like it, of course considering the thought of the poem, it's so sad.
You are a good writer, I admire your poem, it's really nice.
What a lovely sad poem of yours, truly love is beautiful yet it gives so much pain. I totally agree with you in that how can you forget the person you love when he/she is all you had?
You gave all you love but still he/she chose to leave you alone.
Well that's life, laughter's always follow by tears but still we have to overcome all the obstacle in our life for us to keep living.
It's a nice poem yet I'm a little bit confuse in your second stanza(4th line), I don't know if you wanted to be hurt slowly or to hurt her slowly.
All in all, it's really a good poem even though its tragic and I really like your last line "there's no love, just rain" :)
Keep writing!
Nice poem.
You made it very good. Your whole interpretation is so clear and your poem almost makes me cry for I really can relate to it.
Nice job, Keep writing!
This poem is good. Though I'm thinking a bit in your last line, Its okay to say that you are over with your partner but not over with yourself. Its confusing, I think it would be better if you rephrase it.
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