I don't usually review poetry because I don't write it and, really, know very little about it. I do, however, know what I like. This poem falls into that category.
I almost feel guilty leaving this review. I am unable to offer any constructive criticism, or criticism at all for that matter. I will simply say, "Job splendidly done," and leave it at that. Probably not much help to you, but hopefully something you enjoy hearing.
This is one of the best poems I've read since stumbling across the works of Virginia Hamilton Adair. Keep writing.
I would challenge anyone to read this and not see the power of the words you use here. Forget punctuation, throw grammar out the door. Write from your heart and you can truly move people. This moved me more than anything else I have read on this site and that is what writing is supposed to do. Keep writing.
I think this is an important thing for people to read. I hope you never do give up because then people wouldn't be able to read what you have written and better understand the difficulty people with your type of problems face.
It would be good for everyone to read this and see how the words they use can affect people. Writing is not all about proper grammar, it is about making people think and feel. I think you have done that very well here.
I encourage you to keep writing because I can see that you have some important things to say. Don't pay any attention to the ratings you might receive they aren't what is important. What is important is that you enjoy writing and their are people who will enjoy reading what you write.
If you ever wantr help in using proper grammar and sentence structure feel free to e-mail me and I will help all I can. Until then keep writing as you are and letting people share in your experiences.
This is funny. My type of humor though I'm not sure that is necessarily a good thing.
I wished there was a little more of it because it is the kind of thought process which I found myself involved in about 22.5 hours out of every day (I don't sleep much) and it's so seldom I find something to read that I can relate to.
There are a couple of things that could be corrected:
"It was wet out because it had rained so that wasn't unusual." - This would read better as, It was wet out, but it had rained so that wasn't unusual.
"My scientific mind wandered across the street"- Minds can't wander. Well, actually they can, but not in this case. This is a physical wandering which requires legs, or at least a wheel-chair. It would be better to say "My scientific mind led me across the street.
"What excuse I was going to give my boss for being late for work."- A little dyslexia snuck in. Should be: What excuse was I going to give my boss for being late for work. I do that a lot myself. I mean the word transference, not being late for work. You have to have a real job to be late for work.
"Perhaps that skunk wouldn't have squirt me" Squirt or Squirted? I'm not sure now for some reason. When I first read it I thought that should be squirted but I've been sitting here saying squirted over and over and now it just sounds silly. I think I have over-pondered.
Anyway, this is funny. Good job.
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