Oh, I love it! such humour! It's a great short story/joke. Man, your good, keep it up, I needed a smile today and thats what your writing has done, so thank you!-Kodie- AQ
I'm going though a divorce right now, some of your word spoke to me, a new book,story, vulnerable, that too is all me. it's a great poem. thank you for writing it.
i'm thinking that has something else to do with your life. I would watch just a little of the flow of words, i also have that problem. but i liked it, keep it up!
I was enjoying the beginning of the story, The mother dying, a crazy evil aunt. It's hard to get into once the story starts at the bakery, I really think you have a good play going, but i wouldn't paint the main girl as a saint right from the start. Keep going, I would still like to read more.
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