I really liked the interesting use of structure here and how it relates to your language. This is quite a different poem. I can't think of any significant improvements.
-Annie x
This is really good. Your repetition of the first line of each creates the sense of ongoing desperation and suffering and the rhetorical questions further this an add more interest and variety. I can't think of any significant improvements.
-Annie x
The personification of melancholy as a companion is a very interesting and poetic idea. The simplicity of the poem is also well done. I cannot think of any significant improvements.
-Annie x
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