The last line makes up for the inadequacy of those that precede it. The first four lines, for me, were generic; cliche. Now, things tend to be cliches for a reason; such conventions tend to be overused because the language is attractive, however I would urge you as a fellow writer to try and search out more original images and ryhmes than this. It isn't that this poem is bad. The problem is that I feel as though I've read it a hundred times before. The last line was this piece's saving grace for me. I don't know why, but after four lines of villainizing the man in this poem, you manage to turn around and give him this bit of praise- calling him beautiful. I liked the contrast there, between the way you called him a monster but then ultimately considered him beautiful.
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