Setting: Greenton, a small town next to a lake, in Canada I think
Voice: 1st person. Written as though the main character is telling the story
Plot: It seems to be about the main character starting a new life in Greenton after moving from Vancouver.
It has a suspenseful ending. They think they have put and end to the horror, or have they?
Great bit of suspense writing in up to date setting I love the way you leave the reader holding on at the end with the cliffhanger ending.
I was scrolling down the list of twenty-some e-mails I had received when I noticed an e-mail from an unknown sender, which I almost deleted. I noticed the subject line: “Welcome to allthingsbeingequal.com.” Electric sparks danced on the exposed skin areas on my body and shocks raced up and down my spine. The erector pillae muscles in my arms made all of the arm hairs stand on end.
As my breath caught in my throat, I opened the note.
I would change part of this to: which I almost deleted. Then I noticed the subject line it was the same as on the note I was handed in the coffee shop
This is just my opinion
I like this a lot and would love to know what he decides to do and what happens.
This is a good piece of work.
The description of the equipment and bait are helpful to people who read the story and don't really know much about fishing.
It shows a father son relationship, a bonding session and the boys moment of pride at the end when he holds the salmon and his dad praises him for his catch.
A well written Sci-fi story using the imortallity and utopian ideas. It has great characters and the places are well described. I cannot wait to read more.
It's nice to see a female as a main character.
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