This idea was a pretty great idea, but the story line was a little lacking. I think that if you add a little more detail and senses (Smell, Taste, Hear, See and Touch) the story would be a little bit more intriguing, other than the lack of detail the horror part.
This didn't get me on the edge of my seat exciting, so maybe add better hooks, and excitement?
Thank you!
~Allora
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