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Review by alicem Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This really moved me, it's so honest and relatable. Thank you for sharing this, it is beautifully written.

Alice :)
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Review of The Beer Cellar  Open in new Window.
Review by alicem Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Reading this aloud, it is clear to the reader that each phrase is full with emotion. Engagement and empathy was consequently almost on a sub-conscious level; a natural response. This is what a great writer is able to do.

If I were to say one thing, I would say be careful about rhyming the same words together. However, this could well be deliberate, and doesn't affect the feeling of the poetry at all.

Thank you for sharing this,

Alice
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Review of Outmaneuvered  Open in new Window.
Review by alicem Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Cherry,

I really enjoyed reading this prologue. I found the writing flowed with ease and the plot was easy to understand, although the ending still leaves the reader guessing as to what could happen next. This is what a good writer does.

Where do I find the story?!

Thanks,

Alice
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Review of Crossroads  Open in new Window.
Review by alicem Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I love the manner and perspective from which this is written. Your writing flows very well to the reader and although a slightly more abstract plot, it is easy to follow and understand. I'm big on capturing small, seemingly insignificant details of a particular moment to create an image in the mind of the reader - and this is what you have done really well here.

If I were to make one constructive comment, I would say consider your tenses at times - for example 'I knew that when I got home something will be (would be?) wrong' and perhaps paragraphing style. However, I've had to be extremely picky here - you've done a wonderful job!

All the best,

Alice :)
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Review of In the Moonlight  Open in new Window.
Review by alicem Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,
I really like the way this is written; how it's short but tells its own story. If I were you, I wouldn't mention the overdose directly, because the rest of your writing is affected by that one word. Having said that, it's wonderfully written, so good job! :)

Alice
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Review by alicem Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
The descriptions in this poem are immaculately constructed, good job!
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Review of cycle  Open in new Window.
Review by alicem Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really really like the message behind this poem, it comes across really well. The only thing I'd do is check the syllable counts for lines for a fluent rhyming structure :) but good job!
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Review of Who is there  Open in new Window.
Review by alicem Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
this is really beautiful.
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Review of Waterfalls  Open in new Window.
Review by alicem Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
beautiful poem.
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Review of Winter  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like this poem, the descriptions are really lovely and delicate reflecting the setting.
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