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Review of EXHAUSTION  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed this read. The pace is excellent. Although it took a but of a turn in the 5th verse and did not really recover. I am not usually a believer in adding workds when not neccassary but ther are a few places wher an extra word would help the rythm

I can see myself as a child feeling much the same way. You h ave choosen the right words to paint you image.

Well done
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Review of The Silent Tears  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent. I think you ahve captured the escence of depression in a simply way.

the rhythm and rhyme make the peice flow well. I see nothing that can be improved

well done
Ritz
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I really enjoyed this peice. The words are perfect to the emotion I think you are trying to envoke.
The one thing I see that could use some tightening up is the punctuation. Use it or dont either way is fine, but in my reading of this peice it feels like you have occasionally used it and missed it in other places. Someone told me in a review of my work to read it out loud. It helps you to hear the punctuation and flow of the peice.
I think this peice flows very well from begining to end and build well to the end.

Well done
Ritz
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Review of Ida, Poem to Me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I really like the way this is written. It is subtle in its subject but stong in its emotion.

Well done
Ritx
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Review of Fear  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Nicely done. I think you have easily shown your point thru your words. The peice reads easily except for one line. "who always see the outside....... ". The line is a little wordy and does not fit the flow of the whole peice but I think the thought is important. Maybe it can be reworded
Otherwise well done
Keep on writing
Ritz
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Review of Tin Man Blues  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
What an interesting thought. How would that heart change the Tin Man and how could he not be heart broken.

I really like the way you have drawn a picture for me of a place I know well but never thought about after the story.

I see no techinical errors and it reads easily.

Well done
Ritz
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Review of The Spider  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Great work.
I like the feel of this. You have drawn an execeptional picture with the words you have choosen. I actually got chills reading this.
I like he way it reads. It has an easy flow. The repeatition makes a strong statement
I like the way it looks. For me there is something about the way a poem sits on a page that adds to the total effect.

Great job
Ritz
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Review of A CRY FOR A CHILD  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow. Those are powerful words put together in a powerful way to illuminate powerful emotions.

This brought tears to my eyes. The title and description are perfect and give the reader a hint of what is to come. This poem flows easily although the emotions make the read difficult.

my favorite part is the first two lines of the fourth verse. They draw an amazing picture.

Well done!
Ritz
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is wonderful. What a special gift you have given in these powerful words

Ritz
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Review of Sad Today  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed this in very few words you paint a picture of the pain we feel when we loose someone special.
This flows well making for an easy read
Thank you
Ritz
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Review of Empty Shell  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like this and the messaging it contains. It is a sad pelce when we realize that we are now older. It is great friends and family that get us through and help to flame the glowing embers

The is a nice easy read and flows very well giving the reader something to think about
Well done
Ritz

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Review of Purple Snakes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I really ejoyes this. I think my fear of snakes might not be so bad if they really were purple. A nice pleasant purple *Smile*
Ithe rythm and rhyme are good. Although I found in reading it out loud the last two verses don't flow quite as well.
The imagery is cry good and I could picture the pond and snakes

Well done
Ritz
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well done. This price reminds us how important our symbols are to us. In this case the symbol brings great comfort.
Your words have drawn a wonderful picture. I can actually see my mom playing with her necklace while reading this.
The rhyhm and rhythm are perfect creating an east read

Nicely done
Ritz
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Review of Desperate  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very well done. The flow of this piece is wonderful and the expressed pain is easy to empathise with.

Thank you for sharing
Ritz
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