I thought it was a moving story. I'm sure it hits home for many people. Interesting perspective on tourists in America. Good descriptive language and emotions were coming through.
I thought it was interesting. I didn't expect the ending. A very brief glimpse into the mind of a stalker? Psychopath? Serial killer? Well written, although short. I was slightly confused in the middle of the story, the order of the chain of events.
I thought this short story or collection of short stories was insightful and unique. I was confused at first and then all the pieces started coming together. Well done. Interesting.
I've started writing a thriller myself so I wanted to read several and see the different approaches. I thought you did great! I was so caught up in the creepiness of it that I forgot it was a nightmare as described in the beginning. It kept me interested and I thought your descriptions were vivid. The story is fast-paced too which I liked. And I loved the ending!
An accurate story of a typical 15 year old's love life. I can relate only too well when I was a teenager and even today... Great, original descriptors, especially when describing the lifeguard. Thanks for the great short story! I'm new to the site. Come rate and review my short story called A Crime of Compassion.
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