Well this was beautiful! I like the splendid imagery and the rhythm was spot-on. This is one of those rare poems that I want to read out-loud to someone because I like how well it rolls off the tongue. One teensy bit of advice: the verse where it says "(the tides would work because me)"--I think there should be a comma right after the "because" to indicate a pause. Or you could insert the word "of" so that it read "the tides would work because of me"--you would also still keep your rhythm! Well done!
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