General Impressions: First I have to say wow. I really liked your story. It was very eye opening for me. I don't think like her about the world and to see it from her eyes makes it wow. Favorite Parts: I like the talk about how Elsa wouldn't give in to the system that is obviously there. She has a plan to get out. I like that an idepent strong woman.
I also liked how the children are talked about and how their personalities are starting to form. Things I noticed: It read nicely. It is one of the few third person stories I actually enjoyed. RNBlackwell
I liked your essay, I really think the battle we have with the shadows, as you say, is because of the fear of rejection. We watch all these shows and movies where everyone is trying to fit in and once they do they are happy. We also don't really communicate with each other anymore it so easy to bully people and be mean. Especially with the technological world where its easy to be something you are not.
One thing that me and my husband do are have trips where the phones are off. Just me and him. Pictures of scenery sure but those days the pictures can't even capture everything we see and do, because we sometimes forget we even have them and enjoy the moment together.
Those are my favorite days, the days that we smell the roses together. I really liked your article I didn't see any errors. And I think it was really well written.
I really like this story so far. It is really unique and at this point I don't know what is going to happen. I really like the world that you are so far building as well. Your characters aren't very flat which is great. I can't wait for the next update.
I really like this one it hits home. Its scary waking up different then you were yesterday. And its awesome when you have someone around who still loves you for you. I think you seriously caught the worries extremely well of not knowing what the other person would think if that would happen. The fear of not wanting to hear the answer but the realization of finally having to know.
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