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Rated: E | (4.0)
Good points:
It clearly gets across the image of a fallen samuri warrior lying in the midst of a shower of cherry blossoms.
(And this with only thirteen words.)
It keeps its rythmn and meter very nicely. One is never thrown out of the poem by a change of meter.

Bad points:
In striving to hold to the meter you have chosen an interesting word order in the third line which I personally find a little jaring.

Otherwise, an excellent haiku.
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