That is amazing but where is it going ? i understand you are comparing the two different 7 year olds and how life can be so different , this is very close to my heart as it is personal which I think a lot will feel the same , I would like to read more though maybe as they grow up and how their dreams can come true or how the fortunate ones life had a turn for the worse .. i feel a lot of passion in what you have written , keep going
Hi I love this ... Very clear and to the point , expressing the feelings and pointing out the things you don`t like for example cameras .. Very eye catching and holding the readers attention , I felt that I was the person in that situation as I was reading it .... I think you have an amazing talent writing in this way .
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